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Old 04-11-2010, 06:29 PM   #2
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Default RE: Story-chapter 1-street rats

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1) You were right your spelling is atrotius.
2) Ended weird? did it end?
3) Its not a bad story, it has plenty of potential, but you should build onto it and rework a few spots.

I love part of my job is food writing for books and coloms, so i took writing classes in College, and became rather good at it. . Id love to help you if you want. You can email me the story and then i can proof read it for you, make corrections, and some minor suggestions and then we can work on posting it as a fanfic or story.
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